22上海中考沖刺英語寫作主題修煉之從低檔
2022年新課標下的沖刺上海中考英語寫作內(nèi)功修煉
(1)新課標下對學生的英語能力的靈活運用的考核又上升了一個臺階,。如明面上的詞匯量上升到2000+,就是一個最好的實例。
(2)新課標下學生的聽說能力要求進一步提高,上海中考聽說測試2023年開始將從目前的10分增加到15-20分,用來篩選學生的意圖更明顯。
(2)上海初中英語從2023年開始將改版,目前用了將近20年的牛津教材將成為歷史,而高中教材已于2020年率先改版,對學生的能力要求更上不止一個臺階,大家自己可以去看下。
今天開始發(fā)幾位基礎中等初三學生的作文修改(坐標:寶山楊浦區(qū)內(nèi)最普通的公辦的學校之一,一模定位:120分左右)
只有同輩作文,才能深有感觸;只有對比原文和我的修改稿,才能懂得寫作之道。請珍惜最干貨!
2.An act of (為清潔工提供食物和水篇)
學生原稿: 得分:7+6+1=14分 B檔
An act of is very to us it can make us feel very .
Last week I saw a the .It was a very hot day so he very ,hot and .He to have the .Then I to give him a hand.I a of milk tea for him.He was so that he me.
An act of me feel very and I am glad to do kind.
我的修改稿: (完全根據(jù)學生原文內(nèi)容基礎上的小修改,請仔細對照,并比較區(qū)別)
得分至少為:8+7.5+3.5=19分 A檔
An act of not only a in need, but also a who help a of .
Last week,I was home when I saw a the . As it was a hot day, he a lot and was wet all over. He very and and to have his job. When I was why he didn't stop to some and take a rest, I his on the .Then I to give him a hand. I a of iced tea from the shop and him some of my that I had for . I also lied to him that I had had for . He my and food and me over and over .
When I saw him food and with a on his face in the , I felt so and was of my act of .